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|Subject: My utopia is dead: by A.O.1. Thu Dec 11, 2008 3:03 pm|| |
***read this with this song, it inspired me to make this poem anyways..:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0Y7Pig3hlQU&feature=related&fmt=18
My Utopia is DEAD
Falling from the stars, fate stood beside me. In this clench of darkness behind my back is sorrow and war.
I write this watching the tanks roll, and the guns firing. Screams of war, violence surronds me.
In peril, i watch my friends in fear and yet hope. No matter the enemy, they wont give up.
My mind thinks so as well. this sanctuary, our paradise, our utopia, is being deminished before our eyes.
The armys wont stop rolling in, and i sit here and cant do anything to help.
Joining my friends in the cry of war, i watch as the war itself rages nonstop, scared to death.
However, if we prevail knowing we had faith, we are heroes.
Knocking the enemy out of our wonders is our goal, and reconstructing peace.
In a few days the war will end..and we'll see what fate has in store for us...watching in awe.
My fears...wash away as tears on my face dripping to the floor planting hope.
I will watch for this to end..and fight to the end as well.
Seeing if our utopia will end not with a moment of silence, but victory.
Standing here watching, I rest my case.
We'll see wht happens...we'll see..
and tht concludes my response to this admin "war".
I hope chris will win..u will and i have hope.
everyone who supports u does..together, we will prevail.
let us charge and make a differance in our community!
vote for chris!
(amazingly handwritten by A.O.1., thank u, and good night.)
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|Subject: Re: My utopia is dead: by A.O.1. Thu Dec 11, 2008 3:17 pm|| |
Cool! I like it!
But you do realize that should go in Stories.
Poems go there too...